G321 thriller planning. Our sequence of shots

1) The film will start with a dark room. Close up of a man's eyes. This will be accompanied by a heartbeat sound that is the beginning of our music and heavy breathing.
2) An outside close up of red/black heels and dark, lacy tights walking along a track.
3) A shot from man on floor of crate perspective: a shadow on the floor and the door of the crate opening.
4) A close up of a woman's red lips smoking.
5) A close up of the man, eyes whimpering, wearing a cross.
6) Shot of two heavy men by the crate door.
7) Wide shot of the men, holding a gun and a cricket bat, the woman walks into crate.
8) The woman comes out of the crate with a cross necklace.
9) The henchmen drag the man out of the crate, the woman steps over the man and drops her cigarette into his blood.
10) The woman gets into the car.
11) The woman looks into the car mirror and sees the man's body on the ground.